01-11-2012, 11:07 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-12-2012, 01:39 AM by Immaterial.)
Nah its okay. 
I actually appreciate comments like these.
It actually relieved me that somebody noticed the difference between the two. As I wrote both of them with a long span of time between them. @_@
Yeah, I've been working on my sentence division lately. (It was a really bad habit I picked up.) I was told I tend to really make long sentences. =))
Sentence pattern huh, Hm, I never thought of looking at those things. *_*
Thanks for pointing that out. I should be a bit more aware then. :3
So yeah, improvement on there is necessary. >.<
As for the stories lack of details like context and physical descriptions, I intended it that way because I want the readers themselves to fill in those things themselves. I want them to infer on their own interpretations based on the pieces of information I gave. I just think giving the characters a definite look or appearance somehow is limiting to the reader. But maybe I overdid it a bit. Or did I?
Now that made me think. XD
But still, I just don't want to explain and give the who, what and why of everything. That I am sure.
It makes everything more personal to the reader, as the story just provides you the situation and emotions felt. By the POV at that.
At least, that's what I think. XD
I actually appreciate comments like these.
It actually relieved me that somebody noticed the difference between the two. As I wrote both of them with a long span of time between them. @_@
Yeah, I've been working on my sentence division lately. (It was a really bad habit I picked up.) I was told I tend to really make long sentences. =))
Sentence pattern huh, Hm, I never thought of looking at those things. *_*
Thanks for pointing that out. I should be a bit more aware then. :3
So yeah, improvement on there is necessary. >.<
As for the stories lack of details like context and physical descriptions, I intended it that way because I want the readers themselves to fill in those things themselves. I want them to infer on their own interpretations based on the pieces of information I gave. I just think giving the characters a definite look or appearance somehow is limiting to the reader. But maybe I overdid it a bit. Or did I?
Now that made me think. XD
But still, I just don't want to explain and give the who, what and why of everything. That I am sure.
It makes everything more personal to the reader, as the story just provides you the situation and emotions felt. By the POV at that.
At least, that's what I think. XD
I can only comfort you through your dreams. When you are wide awake, all I can do is smile and enjoy your presence.
