Fangs of a Zaber - Discussion

[Grim]

This is my first fanfic so I figured I would dwell on in hopes of being descriptive...I just did it in the wrong place. Where do you think I should be more descriptive? I feel I am pretty descriptive in the battle sequences or am I wrong?

Also, how long should i make this fanfic go? 10-15 chapters? 15-20? This would help me know what details to cut out and what not.

I think the battles need more description. Show to us not only what's happening as events, but as events with sights and sounds and smells. Also, show what the characters feel during combat. Fear, excitement, arrogance, etc.

Since this is your first fic, and you're already on your 6th chapter, put the cap somewhere between 15-20. You'll need to speed up some of the events though, as things are moving a bit slowly right now.