12-30-2006, 02:16 PM
Wow....all I can say is wow. One unbelievably long chapter and everything was just great.
Nice going on how you resolved last chapter's cliffhanger. I may be wrong but I think there were some unspoken lines when they entered the room after opening up to each other, specifically that part where Hitomi said she wanted to find out what love is, then Jaden replies that they'll find out together: there was something there. It may not be visible but it was there.
Their dinner under the stars and the ensuing dialogue was both educational and heartwarming. It was simply the most romantic interaction between the two in the entire fic so far. I could just picture them sitting there and could almost hear "Eyes on Me" from FF8 playing in the background.
This chapter is now one of my favorites, along with 7 and 11. I can't wait to see how the hero saves the girl again in the next chapter.
Nice going on how you resolved last chapter's cliffhanger. I may be wrong but I think there were some unspoken lines when they entered the room after opening up to each other, specifically that part where Hitomi said she wanted to find out what love is, then Jaden replies that they'll find out together: there was something there. It may not be visible but it was there.
Their dinner under the stars and the ensuing dialogue was both educational and heartwarming. It was simply the most romantic interaction between the two in the entire fic so far. I could just picture them sitting there and could almost hear "Eyes on Me" from FF8 playing in the background.
This chapter is now one of my favorites, along with 7 and 11. I can't wait to see how the hero saves the girl again in the next chapter.
I hate the way you talk to me. And the way you cut your hair.
I hate the way you drive my car. I hate it when you stare.
I hate your big dumb combat boots And the way you read my mind.
I hate you so much it makes me sick — It even makes me rhyme.
I hate the way you're always right. I hate it when you lie.
I hate it when you make me laugh — Even worse when you make me cry.
I hate it that you're not around. And the fact that you didn't call.
But mostly I hate the way I don't hate you — Not even close, not even a little bit, not even at all.
I hate the way you drive my car. I hate it when you stare.
I hate your big dumb combat boots And the way you read my mind.
I hate you so much it makes me sick — It even makes me rhyme.
I hate the way you're always right. I hate it when you lie.
I hate it when you make me laugh — Even worse when you make me cry.
I hate it that you're not around. And the fact that you didn't call.
But mostly I hate the way I don't hate you — Not even close, not even a little bit, not even at all.
