Fox's fanfics

[Necron]

Hot damn! Lunar gives an even better review than i did. Just what is it that you studied in English and Masscom that makes you two that good at writing? Now that she mentioned it, yeah, the titles and the lyric inserts are a nice touch. Gives a good idea of things to come.

Here's what i think of the latest chaps. I noticed that starting from chap10, each succeeding installment gets longer and more interesting.

Chap11: Jaden's torpe-ness seems to have taken hold. I knew it, Pinoy nga talaga sya! Half-serious, half-funny was what i thought of this chapter. The funny parts was Jaden's "homo-gag" and Hitomi's "flashing" of Jaden. What I really liked was Jaden's story, Hitomi's promise and the way they held each other during the ending was very (as Lunar would put it) heartwarming. So basically what Jaden asked for in the end was permission from Hitomi to start courting her? That guy's a good smooth-talker. )

Chap12: Hell yeah! Now's about time for things to start heating up! I could tell that the massage Jaden gave to Hitomi somehow got to her and that was why she did "it" after taking a bath. Actually, i was disappointed because that was all that happened, although i had hopes for some action to happen after they kissed. Overall, good chapter and nice touch on Hitomi's singing.

Chap13: And there it is. A funny conversation, a lot of smooching, a few hilarious moments during the kissing and after a year and a half of beating around the bush, the two have fallen in love. About time. Now when does the real "action" start?

Damn. I expect the rest of the fic to be even better now that their true feelings have been revealed. Keep it up Fox!

Oh and you really should consider my (collaboration with Lunar) and Doom Trigger's (manga or RPG) proposal. Who knows what may come out of it but it can only be good.