10-12-2006, 12:51 AM
That was quick. I just posted my answers this afternoon and the fanfic's there already?
Creepy. Just plain creepy.
okay, here's what i think.
Last Stand:
Okay like i said before, it was a little harsh, ACs getting mauled left and right, an endless stream of suicide weapons and the eventual death of all characters. Grim, harsh but realistic. Last stands are like that. Everybody dies, slaughtered to the last man.
Here's the puncher: Your writing style is good. Not great but not bad either. The storytelling is eloquent enough although some parts of Onslaught seemed a little rushed. The action sequences were detailed but slightly drawn out. Overall, there's talent there but you could stand a bit of improvement.
Wings of Tomorrow:
The first installment is good. Reads a bit like your first fanfic although at least somebody made it out alive. Hitomi? The girl from Escaflowne? You've got to be kidding me. :blink:
Creepy. Just plain creepy.
okay, here's what i think.
Last Stand:
Okay like i said before, it was a little harsh, ACs getting mauled left and right, an endless stream of suicide weapons and the eventual death of all characters. Grim, harsh but realistic. Last stands are like that. Everybody dies, slaughtered to the last man.
Here's the puncher: Your writing style is good. Not great but not bad either. The storytelling is eloquent enough although some parts of Onslaught seemed a little rushed. The action sequences were detailed but slightly drawn out. Overall, there's talent there but you could stand a bit of improvement.
Wings of Tomorrow:
The first installment is good. Reads a bit like your first fanfic although at least somebody made it out alive. Hitomi? The girl from Escaflowne? You've got to be kidding me. :blink:
<span style='color
ed'><span style='font-family
ptima'>This world is one of sadness. Battle brings death. Death brings sorrow. The living... may not hear them. Their voices... may fall upon deaf ears. But make no mistake... the dead... are not silent. Now you will know the sorrow of those whose lives you have ended... <br>-The Sorrow, Metal Gear Solid 3</span></span>
ed'><span style='font-familyptima'>This world is one of sadness. Battle brings death. Death brings sorrow. The living... may not hear them. Their voices... may fall upon deaf ears. But make no mistake... the dead... are not silent. Now you will know the sorrow of those whose lives you have ended... <br>-The Sorrow, Metal Gear Solid 3</span></span>
